• 2022-06-03 问题

    revise the following paragraphThis paragraph uses only simple sentences. Not onlyis it monotonous to read, but the author has also failed to give the reader clues about whatis the most important information. In order to fix this paragraph,you need to determine which ideas are foundational to the paragraph and which simply provide examples. By subordinating some ideas,you will be able to create variety and emphasize key ideas.Keeping things cool is one of the best inventions of this century. Air conditioners keep houses cool. Refrigerators keep food cold. Temperature controls keep cars cool. This may seem expensive. It requires a lot of electricity. Power is a commodity. Really, it saves money. Food lasts longer. People are more productive. Transportation is more effective. The ability to control cold is clearly important.

    revise the following paragraphThis paragraph uses only simple sentences. Not onlyis it monotonous to read, but the author has also failed to give the reader clues about whatis the most important information. In order to fix this paragraph,you need to determine which ideas are foundational to the paragraph and which simply provide examples. By subordinating some ideas,you will be able to create variety and emphasize key ideas.Keeping things cool is one of the best inventions of this century. Air conditioners keep houses cool. Refrigerators keep food cold. Temperature controls keep cars cool. This may seem expensive. It requires a lot of electricity. Power is a commodity. Really, it saves money. Food lasts longer. People are more productive. Transportation is more effective. The ability to control cold is clearly important.

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